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Commentary!

JGray
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As promised, from here on in, I'll be giving you commentary. I thought I'd start off with commentary on the storyline in general, however, instead of this page in specific. It might help provide a little context.

Originally, my plan for the second storyline of Mysteries of the Arcana was to do something to better introduce readers to the larger cast. Maybe a scavenger hunt. Maybe a night of terror as the Inn's defenses go wild, forcing people to team up in wacky and unusual pairs. As “More Heavens and Earths” began winding up, though, I realized there was a problem. While I believe I had done a good job establishing Chrystalline and Theresa, the speed of the plot didn't allow for development of their interpersonal dynamic. Beyond a wow moment, a bit of tension, and some sympathy, they were understandably more focused on the job to be done than each other.

So, I decided, the next storyline had to help develop Chrys and Theresa's relationship with each other. After a great deal of debate, I also decided that nothing further could happen until the motivations for Theresa's suicide attempt were revealed.

That's what this storyline is about. The events that led up to Theresa walking down into the tunnels and meeting Chrys. Chapter 2, “All the Way Down” will explore how those events led to Theresa and Chrys meeting and, more importantly, what effect the events will have on how Theresa and Chrys grow as friends and, possibly, more.

Okay, I lied. One bit of commentary on this page. This isn't the first time a vision of Debby has shown up in the comic. Check HERE if you're interested.

Happy reading!

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weertangel
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Guest post by "weertangel"

First, nice commentary, it really helps, just don't try to reveal to much, or u might spoil a suprise u planned.

as for the page, that is one of the sickest pages i have seen in a comic for quite some time, i mean, seing someone else in your own(very green!)bile?! not to mention the way IT comes out really had me looking away for a sec...

for the rest, great page!

Submitted May 17, 2010 at 12:59PM



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This was definitely one of those "on the verge" pages for me. I told J, I was even tempted to go 110% and have it be extremely graphic (out the nose, and all that) but decided that this was plenty far enough. Anything more and it'd probably make the page impossible to read and keep your lunch down.






Submitted May 17, 2010 at 1:34PM




JD
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Theresa ate Debbie!! ... and a gallon of pea soup.

Submitted May 17, 2010 at 3:00PM



JGray
 

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I'd say you ain't seen nothing yet but this isn't Saw or Hostel. That was pretty much the end of the gross.






Submitted May 18, 2010 at 8:03AM



uhl
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So, not Hostel, or Saw, perhaps "The Exorcist?" It's well known for projectile pea soup.

Submitted May 18, 2010 at 8:51AM



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So that was just regular bile then? Because the steady stream and the way it's highlighted make it look like a drawn out blob of very viscous ooze. As if she was carrying some kind of foul demon spawn in her belly!

Submitted May 20, 2010 at 9:06PM



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And I now saw that the answer to my question could be found on the very next page, which I tried not to look at before reading this one. (I'm a bit behind on my comic-reading this week.)

Submitted May 20, 2010 at 9:13PM



JGray
 

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Uhl - This stuff's a little thicker than pea soup.

Gillsing - Not regular bile, no. Just what it is will become clear as the comic moves forward.






Submitted May 21, 2010 at 6:49AM



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