I think my favorite chapter has to be 6, this chapter. Chrys and T are finally accepting each other as girlfriends! The story has come so far and has so much more to explore. I think T is mostly over her stigma and is trying to focus more on her feeling for Chrys, hence the hedges damn near boning one another. Shes gotta be thinking about her and Chrys, and not the stigmas her religion has placed on her sexuality. Also i love the art. It got wonky a few chapters ago with Chrys' dad, but this is excellent. Good job. Also, the writing is in such a great place. Pace is good, story is well done, and it flows from idea to action perfectly.
My least favorite is 5. I think was OOC at the end there. After fighting alongside one another from day one, (cause idk how much time has passed since chap1) and growing closer to Will, and MUCH closer to Chrys, T was still hesitant about taking down Ruby, the traitorous, two-timing, double-crossing, robot. Ruby was an outsider, and was revealed to be a pawn of the bad guys, and here's where it gets weird. If T thought Ruby was sentient, i understand the hesitation, but that means ruby was CHOOSING to attack, then continue attacking T and Chrys. So for T to see the choice to attack, and still hesitate? Odd. Gotta protect that lesbian elf gf of yours T. On the other hand if T thought that Ruby was just a robot pawn, incapable of choice, Why hesitate at all? Its attacking you, and your hot lesbian elf gf. Shoot it and move on. Either way T was seriously bent about killing the robot and i couldn't figure out why, It was either a pawn, or CHOSE to hurt her, and it made me re read it over a bunch to see if i missed anything because both reasons are not worth her time or compassion. It was just this whole big awesome setup and fight scene that had such a cruddy ending because the main character who is usually badass, was like oh your a traitor robot? Oh your hurting me and my gf? Hurting us worse now? oh ok. Oh even worse now? hmm ok. Your choosing to do this to us? alrighty. Meanwhile poor Chrys is writhing in pain on the floor. and what felt like an eternity later, T takes the robot out. It was just the first really odd bit of writing/pacing/character inaction i think we've witnessed to date.
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